A Haikunelle: A Japanese and French Poetic Synchronization

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After the positive response I received for my selection of five haiku in celebration of International Haiku Poetry Day, I figured there might be an audience for my haikunelle. If you search for the form online, you likely won’t find an official definition of the haikunelle, but I imagined the form six years ago as a combination of the traditional Japanese haiku with the French villanelle. Each stanza of the villanelle (except for the final quatrain) is a complete haiku. The rhyme scheme still follows the traditional villanelle form, and the syllabic structure follows the haiku’s guidelines.

I have not given up on my series of color poems, but wanted to park here for one more day. I have the “yellow” sonnet complete and ready to post, and I have begun working on the “green” poem while nodding off in bed at the close of day. This allows me the opportunity to showcase two wonderful poetic forms and reference Christian Wiman, a well-known poet and editor of Poetry magazine. The line that became the inspiration for this haikunelle comes from his book, My Bright Abyss: Meditation of a Modern Believer.

“I waste too much time in the little lightless caverns of my own mind.”

Christian Wiman, from My Bright Abyss: Meditations of a Modern Believer

If you’re like me, an internal processor, then you know what it is to spend too much time in the caverns of your own mind. I also know that spending too much time there isn’t healthy for me (or my family). Let this poem be an invitation to come out of that cave and into the light of day.

Caverns of My Mind

Vincent H. Anastasi - 2015

I waste too much time
imprisoned in these lightless
caverns of my mind.

This striving to find
leaves me naught but vain excess.
I waste too much time

plumbing depths to climb
yet unearth only endless
caverns of my mind:

scope of hope confined
despite this seeming largess.
I waste too much time

spinning paltry rhymes,
my conscience seeking redress —
caverns of my mind.

Seeing, I am blind
to what no thought might address;
I waste too much time —
caverns of my mind.


5 responses to “A Haikunelle: A Japanese and French Poetic Synchronization”

  1. […] of haiku vignettes back in 2015, and then merged the haiku with the villanelle in what I call a haikunelle in 2021. Here, then, is my quintet of cinquains inspired by my encounter with the Sandhill Cranes.NOTE: For […]

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  2. Leanne Avatar

    I love your Haikunelle and have been playing around with this form (prompted by you). Because I am like this stuff. I make templates to use for my poetry and have done just that so it’s easy for me to write poetry in different forms without having to read up on them every time. After kicking around in Google I cannot find another example of Haikunelle, so in my template I have credited you as being the source of the Haikunelle form. I would like to share this form with my writing group, using my template. Is that okay with you? Do you want a copy of my notes and template? If so, please let me know.

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    1. Greetings, Leanne! I am glad you found the form to be an inspiration. And thank you for the credit as well! Please freely share with your writing group. If it can inspire others, then all the better! I would love to see your notes and template. I should return to this form myself. You’ve actually inspired me to share this form with my students in AP English this week as we wrap up a discussion on the role of form in poetry. Blessings!

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      1. Leanne Coleman Avatar
        Leanne Coleman

        Thank you so much. Have already started another Haikunelle. Please find my notes and template attached. There are a doc and PDF file for each the notes and template, and the template alone – means you can tweak for yourself or just use the visual pdfs if you wish.

        

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      2. I guess I can’t see your files through a comment, but I’m grateful for your willingness to share! In a world where we have begun to give not only our thinking but also our creativity away to AI, any opportunity to create original work is a celebration of life and what it means to be human!

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